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2008-11-13 [Alexi Ice]: 'If given the chance I would try my hardest to learn as fast as I can'
I think there is something wrong with this sentance, I just don't know what...I think it should be
I will try my hardest to learn as fast as I can
or
I would try my hardest to learn as fast as I could.
2008-11-13 [Alexi Ice]: As a member of the crew it would gladly work hard to make Elftown better
As a member of the crew I will gladly work hard to make elftown better
2008-11-13 [Alexi Ice]: I would try to push the rest of the crew to recognize photographers
I will try to push the rest of the crew to recognize photographers.
In most of the paragraphs you are speaking in past tense, you might want to fix that
2008-11-13 [Alexi Ice]: There's no problem there.
I am not sure that this is a sentence
2008-11-13 [Alexi Ice]: Literally, I'm a sponge
This is not a sentance either and neither is this;
Because I think I would be a productive member of the crew.
2008-11-13 [Alexi Ice]: I'll keep this and brief. I love elftown.
This should be
I'll keep this breif; I love elftown.
2008-11-13 [Alexi Ice]: who may be stuck on any of their own ideas.
This sentance doesn't necessarily make sense
2008-11-13 [Alexi Ice]: I can multi-task when needed to so I have no problems juggling as many assignments given to me.
I can multi-task when needed so I have no problems juggling the many assinments given to me. ^^
Ok, that is all I have found so far...
2008-11-13 [Thunder Cid]: Wow...I suck at grammar.
2008-11-13 [Alexi Ice]: And you may want to add a link back to the apply to the crew
2008-11-13 [Alexi Ice]: It's not a problem, I am just overyly obsessed with grammar. LOL. That is why I want to be an english major.
2008-11-13 [Thunder Cid]: And that's why I'm an art major XD
2008-11-13 [Alexi Ice]: ^^ Anyway if you change the past tense to present tense and fix what I mentioned it should be good.
2008-11-13 [Chimes]: Mine was pretty much all in the past tense.. :P But then again... mine was weird. XD
2008-11-13 [Alexi Ice]: OH! I want to read yours ^^
2008-11-13 [Chimes]: Mine's on apply to the crew in the crew section thinger. :] Second from bottom... I think.
2008-11-13 [Alexi Ice]: I went and checked it out ^^ And commented! Woot.
2008-11-13 [Alexi Ice]: Alright cool.
2008-11-13 [Thunder Cid]: *passes out*
2008-11-13 [Alexi Ice]: What?
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